Lucky Blog 13

1. When we were first introduced to the Script Frenzy Project I was actually really excited. I thought it would have been a fantastic opportunity to work on a script that I already had an idea for. I thought that adhereing to a set timeline and deadlines would help me stay focused and motivated.

2. I thought the way that this class implimted this project was so awful I cannot describe it in school appropriate words. First off, we didn't even DO script frenzy. We literally spent weeks talking about arbitrary, elementary things such as "different kinds of scripts", as opposed to actually writing the scripts during the month of April. Don't get me wrong, I totally understand that character developments and outlines are essential to writing scripts, but we spent entitely too much time on these things. By the time we even started writing, April was over. Yet you still expected us to write one hundred pages.

3. Character development and the outlines were helpful, but like I said before we spent too much time on them. The rest of the "planning" time was literally the biggest waste of class time I have ever experienced in an English class, and that is saying something. We are not stupid. We know the difference between a movie script and a television script and do not need to spend forever and a day talking about it.

Blog #12

Scene Reflection

1. I think these scene uses a lot of good descriptions in trying to explain what exactly is going on vs. what the viewer sees going on. It uses flashbacks to show past events from the morning and impliments camera angles and shots to limit what the audience sees, for comidic effect.

2. I don;t think its actually funny which sort of sucks because this is supposed to be a comedy show,

3. I would make it funnier, and try to make it more clear as to what I want the final product to look like (camera angles, shot descriptions, video transitions, etc.)

BLOG 10

DENISE: (grinning a little)

Ladies…

(The girls lower their heads and walk quietly towards the back row of tables.)

TARA (V.O.):

Ahh, the walk of shame.

(The girls sit, and Denise averts her glance. The staff turns back towards her, attentively)

DENISE: (commanding, but not intimidating)

 As I was saying the ….

(Her voice fades off as Tara’s monologue kicks in and overpowers the outside noises. While Tara narrates, the image remains on Denise talking. She is commanding but not scary, and talks with her hands.)

TARA (V.O.):

 Denise is the camp owner. Well, technically her father Bob..

(Cameras cuts to an older looking man, Bob, wearing a baseball cap and a camp-labeled tank top in which his gut hangs out of. He really is only about 60 years old, but his gray beard and belly make him appear older. He is slouched over on a table, sleeping lazily. )

TARA (V.O.) (cont.):

 is…

(Camera cuts back to Denise talking to the crowd of staff.)

But she’s the one who does all of the leadership stuff. She handles the paperwork, the parents, and of course, her loyal subjects…

(Cut to shot of the pavilion, displaying the sea of green-shirted staff. They are looking forward, some attentively listening, others dazing off.)

TARA (V.O.) (cont.):

The counselors. Of course she doesn’t do it alone…

(Camera pans out and down to show Danielle, a curvy woman in her late thirties with piercing green eyes and styled auburn hair. She wears silver hoop earrings, and is sitting on the edge of the bench underneath where Denise is standing. You can tell by the way she sits that she is a very commanding person, yet has a vibrant personality. While the voiceover overrides the background noise, we see Danielle look up every now and then and chuckle or point to someone, as if to laugh at an inside joke or make flirtatious eye contact with someone. She has an open binder out in front of her and occasionally glances down to answer Denise’s questions or check references, etc.)

TARA (V.O.) (cont.):

That’s Danielle, the assistant director. In the many years that I was a camper here, I have come to know her very well. I wouldn’t quite say that she’s “like a mother to me”, but I guess something close to it. Maybe more like that one aunt you have that never go married and always gets too drunk at Christmas dinner but still sends you the best gifts on your birthday. But as much as I love Danielle, I kind of tiptoe around her. Not only can she be a terrifying human being when angry, she holds a lot of power in this place.

(Tara’s monologue fades out and the camera pans back out and on to Denise again. She is now holding a piece of paper that she picked up off the bench from Danielle’s binder.)

DENISE:

Alright so that’s, that…(She twists around as if to glance at a clock) I want to go over the groups one more time so you all can get familiar with each other a little more before your campers get here.

(Denise begins to list names in groups as Tara’s monologue briefly comes back and overshadows Denise once again.)

TARA (V.O.):

All the campers are divided into groups by age.

(As Tara goes on to describe the age groups, videos of sample campers in these groups are played.)

TARA(V.O.)(cont.):

  “A” group is the youngest, ages 3-5…

(We see a crying toddler clinging to his mom’s legs, a small girl standing still with a look of washed-over awe on her face while she picks her nose and wedgie, simultaneously, and another girl chasing a boy in circles enthusiastically…all at once. The scene is meant to look chaotic.)

TARA(V.O.)(cont.):

and “G” group is the oldest, ages 11-13…

(We see a group of awkward-stage looking children, the boys sitting on one corner of the bench playing with action figures and a football, the girls at the other, braiding hair and making friendship bracelets. There is the classic awkward middle-school tension between them)

 TARA(V.O.)(cont.):

Then, if you still aren’t “too cool” to keep spending your parents money at summer day camp, you become an “LIT, aka Leader In Training aka teen-angsty-camper” for three years

(We see a group of teens. The girls are in sunglasses, smacking gum while texting and giggling. There are a group of boys in the corner, crowded around something that appears to be a porno-magazine. There is a 14-year old couple flirting.. “no you stop!”..)

TARA(V.O.)(cont.):

 Then finally,

(The camera cuts back to real time, with the focus on Tara as she comes out of her monologue/daydream)

TARA(V.O.)(cont.):

Staff. Actually, as far as the whole “too cool for camp” factor goes, I’m kind of surprised that Morgan made it this far.

(Camera pans to Morgan, sitting on the bench next to Tara. She is clearly not paying attention to what Denise is saying, as she types furiously away on her blackberry. As always, she has a faint look of aloofness on her face.)

Blog #11

(About the dialogue in Blog #9)

1. This scene takes place in two seperate areas. One is Tara's (the main character) bedroom, and the other is the bedroom/bathroom of her friend, Morgan. This is shown through the use of split screen to illustrate their phone conversation. There are also flashbacks involved, which all take place at camp

2. It is morning time, around 7 am. Its in the summer, so the morning sky is bright and lights up the rooms well.

3. While Tara is talking on the phone, we see her in her room. She is the one having the "flashbacks" which work to describe the relationship between her and Morgan. In these flashbacks there are three seperate stages of the girls' lives as their friendship grows and they walk in to camp together. While Morgan is shown on the phone, she appears to be multitasking with many things that change each time the camera comes back to her. Doing her makeup, painting her toenails, applying lipgloss, etc.

4.
  (INT. TARA'S ROOM - MORNING)
  (INT. MORGAN'S BATHROOM - MORNING)
  (INT. MORGAN'S ROOM - MORNING)
  (EXT. CAMP WALKWAY - MORNING)

Blog #8

1) sharp and lean...move things along

2) mouth your dialogue...sound your words. edit other peoples real life dialogue

3) speech manorisms..how they were raised, expression, their personality. who they are

BLog #9 - Dialogue Draft: Relationship

(As she is putting on her backpack we hear the buzz/chime of a cell phone. Tara hears it too and perks up. She pulls off the bag she just put on her back and zips it open. She paws through her bag furiously looking for it. Some bangs fall out of her ponytail and land over her forehead and eyes. She continues to rummage, now faster, as the phone rings and she blows the pieces of hair off her face in exasperation. She finds the phone – just in the nick of time – and glances at the screen before she presses a button and then puts it to her ear.)

TARA: Hey.

(Split screen moves in from the right. On the new right side we see a bronzed, light haired brunette wearing Gucci sunglasses. She is leaning towards a bathroom mirror, applying lip-gloss with one hand and holding her Blackberry to her ear with the other. This is Morgan, as we soon learn)

MORGAN: (her tone is slightly vapid, like she’s distracted/disinterested, but this is just how she talks) So we’re still on for Jitters before work right?

(We see Morgan close the lip gloss and she stares down at her nails, finely manicured, and picks at them a little. As Tara answers, Morgan’s split of the screen slides out to the right.)

TARA: (Her face looks slightly confused, eyes squinted a little. Her tone is half questioning, half confused, and a pinch of humored by her friend’s tone) Uh yeah we’re “still on”. (The last part of her sentence is elevated to mock Morgan’s.)

(Tara puts food in a dog bowl and a small pitbull/hound mutt (or something like that) brushes past her leg to get to the food. She bends down a little to ruffle the fur on the dog’s head. The camera stays on Tara but we can hear Morgan talking on the phone in the background, though the words are heard more as mumbles as Tara’s voice over eventually overshadows them.)

TARA (V.O.): I don’t know why we wouldn’t be “still on”. We were always “on” for Jitters on the first day of camp. We always stop for coffee before the first morning so we don’t all have to arrive separately.

(Screen cuts to Morgan chatting vigorously on the phone while painting her toenails. We see her mouth moving and invigorated expressions but we can’t hear what she is saying due to the layover of Tara’s voice over narration.)

TARA (V.O.): That’s Morgan, by the way. She and our other friend, Nora, met at camp about twelve years ago. We’ve been inseparable since. Every first day we make our mothers drive us to Jitters so that we can all get to camp at the same time and walk in together.

(Flashback to three small girls walking in with their parents all close behind, carrying camp bags on their shoulders. They look eager to get there, running ahead of their parents.)

TARA(V.O.): As we got older, we only became closer.

(Transition to the same girls, now about age 9 walking in together without their parents, they are all holding hands and giggling, eating donuts.)

TARA (V.O.):  Our friendship even survived the inevitable “awkward stage”.

(Transition to the girls again, now about 13. They are wearing Abercrombie and sunglasses, holding cappuccinos and flip phones, trying to look “too cool” for everyone else there.)

(Tara comes out of the flashback and back to the split screen of her conversation with Morgan, who is still talking, now swiping bronzer across her cheeks in the mirror.)

MORGAN: …and I said to her that she just needs to swallow it like its not that bad ya know?

TARA: (coming back to the conversation, realizing that she has no idea what she is talking about) Uh yeah, right…

MORGAN: Thanks Tara! You always know what to say. So I’ll see you in like ten minutes, kay? Toodles!

(The split screen closes as Tara rolls her eyes a little as she holds her phone in her hand a little confused and exhausted by the conversation she tuned out of.)

TARA: (while shutting her phone, in a sarcastic tone) Uh toodles?

Blog #6

Ok sorry this is out of order but heres my outline:

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(The show opens in a bedroom light by the rising sun as an alarm goes off. Camera cuts to a lumped body under a sheet as the alarm blares. Camera close up on arm coming out of covers searching for the alarm, slamming down on it once it finds it. Cut to the face of the girl, Tara, head on as she splashes cold water over her face. She looks tired and her eyes are puffy from lack of sleep. Her voice narrates her thoughts)

- The narrator drives to work with her friends, they are late and arrive awkwardly at the meeting after it has already started.

-she meets her group of counselors, then the campers

-day goes on

-etc.

-etc.

-after a week of exhaustion she has an epiphany with a camper.

-Read blog 7 for further description